America has problems, but America is NOT THE PROBLEM!~
Published on October 16, 2006 By Moderateman In Writing

 The killer did not know she was being watched by a far more dangerous predator.

The killer had been stalked for several days now and had not a clue about it as she kept to herself watching, waiting for the prey to pass once again close enough to reach out and puncture it, draining all life fluids from it.

The much more dangerous killer also watched and waited, patiently for the opportunity to strike, knowing in the end he will win this contest of life and death.

The time was coming as he watched her set up to kill again, he vowed not to let her continue on her killing ways. She was much to dangerous to be allowed to live, not in his world he vowed.

Simultaneously they both struck, his blow though was the killing blow, as she died he watched with fascination, her writhing pleased him to no end. Her prey had escaped to live for another day, not even knowing what had transpired just inches away.

He stood now, wiping his killing instrument on a clean rag.....

Walked back inside to him home.. knowing the female killer was gone from his life...

 

Damn black widows!


Comments
on Oct 16, 2006
What about White Widows?

Oh wait, you mean spiders!

Very good! Loved the imagery.
on Oct 16, 2006
I just found a dead brown recluse in my bathroom sink. I am glad that I am moving!
on Oct 16, 2006
(Citizen)MartimusOctober 16, 2006 13:59:32


I just found a dead brown recluse in my bathroom sink. I am glad that I am moving!


I almost lost my right leg due to a recluse bite. as it is my right calf where I was bitten has a 50 cent peice size scar on it.
on Oct 16, 2006
(Citizen)Dr. GuyOctober 16, 2006 13:53:01


Very good! Loved the imagery.


thanx doc, did you guess what was happening before the end?
on Oct 16, 2006
A great piece of writing Elie. You had me anxious wanting to get to the end and no, I didn't realise what it was until the end! A great piece of suspense there!
on Oct 16, 2006
(Citizen)foreverserenityOctober 16, 2006 14:06:07


A great piece of writing Elie. You had me anxious wanting to get to the end and no, I didn't realise what it was until the end! A great piece of suspense there!


Great? hardly. But was fun trying to disguise what was happening. thank you donna for your kindnes.
on Oct 16, 2006
thanx doc, did you guess what was happening before the end?


Some. But i thought it was 2 predators , as in a Dog and cat.
on Oct 16, 2006

Reply By: Dr. GuyPosted: Monday, October 16, 2006
thanx doc, did you guess what was happening before the end?


Some. But i thought it was 2 predators , as in a Dog and cat.

aha, the greatest two predators I know, man and a spider.

on Oct 17, 2006
I didn't see it coming. Nice one, Elie.
on Oct 17, 2006

Reply By: dynamasoPosted: Tuesday, October 17, 2006
I didn't see it coming. Nice one, Elie

High praise indeed maso. thank you

on Oct 17, 2006
(Citizen)little-whipOctober 17, 2006 18:27:41


Whatchoo got aginst black widdas, Elie? Dey's just like white widdas, only darka.


I must be the unluckiest man in America whip, caught a recluse bite in Fla. then not one but two widow bites right here in ca.
on Oct 17, 2006
BTW whip... simon? Job?