America has problems, but America is NOT THE PROBLEM!~
Published on May 2, 2006 By Moderateman In Fiction Writing
The sweat poured over his eyes, the band on his head soaked from waiting days in intolerable heat and humidity.

He glanced at his spotter and the O.I.C. of this op. Once more he glanced through the scope, there he was, all pressed and clean,

He figured 700 yards, not out of his best shot by far. He took a deep breath, let it out slowly and caressed the trigger, he rolled with the shot, bringing the scope down to see where his target was hit, then the world exploded! They must have been spotted themselves, quickly they packed up and started to run. Cambodia was not supposed to be part of this war, but he went where he was told, 80 miles to the Vietnam border, run!

Run! the three men although unequal in rank, were now united in one thing and one thing only.. run! Hours passed and they could still hear the troops on there tail, too many to fight, there was only one thing to do, run! Hours passed, breath coming in short gasps, run! Life turned into the pounding of his feet against the earth, run was all he could think, soon his weapon grew to heavy, he smirked at the officer and tossed his prize 1903 Springfield, run.. Early daylight turned into night, no stopping, watering themselves at full tilt. run.. Legs started to turn into lead weights and still they ran, the sound of pursuit grew fainter, but that gave no comfort to them, it could be the V.C. on their tails now and they were silent as the mist, run...

Night turned into daybreak and on they ran.. run!.. life had turned into a self imposed torture, run.. The miles became endless.. how many have they already run? how many to go till safety?.. run! Now the third day was approaching, they must be close, run!!

Lungs heaving, back breaking, fear induced, run... Muscles crying from the build up of lactic acid and not enough water.... run!

Over the last hill through a rice paddy, smiling faces, brothers faces, they were saved, no need to run anymore!
118 Miles they figured they ran, collapsing to the moist ground, falling instantly asleep, dreaming of ...,run!
Comments (Page 1)
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on May 02, 2006
Too cool...felt like I was THERE! That one's a keeper, MM...
on May 02, 2006
Reply By: ShovelheatPosted: Tuesday, May 02, 2006Too cool...felt like I was THERE! That one's a keeper, MM...


wow thanx joe, I am trying to write more about other stuff besides politics.
on May 02, 2006
I am trying to write more about other stuff besides politics.


you have my undying support!
on May 02, 2006
Great read Elie...Thank youi !!!
on May 02, 2006
#3 by Shovelheat
Tuesday, May 02, 2006


you have my undying support!


as you have mine.
on May 02, 2006
#4 by Gimpyone
Tuesday, May 02, 2006


Great read Elie...Thank youi !!!


awwwwww michele, thank you love, hey! 23 days till you are here.. yayyyyy hooooooooo
on May 02, 2006

You got to write more!  This is like being given a taste of caviar and then told that is all!

YOu do write very well!

on May 02, 2006
#7 by Dr. Guy
Tuesday, May 02, 2006


You got to write more! This is like being given a taste of caviar and then told that is all!
YOu do write very well!


thank you doc, I hope to improve my feeble skills and turn into 1/2 the writer of the fazz or buddah or dylan.
on May 02, 2006
I liked the urgency of this writing. well done.
on May 02, 2006
#9 by Buddha Moskowitz
Tuesday, May 02, 2006


liked the urgency of this writing. well done.


for some reason the word urgency as goes with this article escapes me. Could you elucidate?
on May 02, 2006
I felt like I was running alongside... there was no distance between the author and this reader -urgent, not removed...
on May 02, 2006
#11 by Buddah Moskowitz
Tuesday, May 02, 2006


felt like I was running alongside... there was no distance between the author and this reader -urgent, not removed...


ohhhh now I understand.. thanx.
on May 02, 2006

Very good job MM.

Really enjoyed this one.

Now I have to RUN!

on May 02, 2006
#13 by Tova7
Tuesday, May 02, 2006


Very good job MM.
Really enjoyed this one.
Now I have to RUN!


cute... run run fast as you can...
on May 02, 2006
This piece has a great rhythm and cadence. Great for reading out loud.
Take this one to an open mic night!
Maggie
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